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July 24, 2013 Posted by: Isaiah

As I sit in the chair,

My heart is beating through my chest.

I see a beast

Filled with anger and

Rage and pain and sorrow

Its eyes shine with fire.

The nostrils flare

The growling set of teeth looking

Back at me.

My life is in danger.

Help.

I forgot our anniversary.



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  1. Daniel - Narberth, Pennsylvania
    July 25, 2013 at 09:28

    Very good and hilarious way to express the idea that Hell hath not fury like a woman's wrath. I think that Shira's comment is very good. For me I think it would be that I forgot to do my homework. I guess that's a little obvious though.

  2. Amber - Philadelphia, PA
    July 25, 2013 at 12:21

    This poem makes me giggle. I enjoy the build up of emotion that leaves the reader wondering why there is such trouble being described. I found a great connection myself with the last line "I forgot our anniversary." Many women would have a problem with that and would certainly tell why the writer felt as if he/she were in a great amount of trouble. ROCK ON!

  3. Shira - Philadelphia, PA
    July 25, 2013 at 12:19

    Yes! I wonder what our own beasts are and how other people would finish the poem.

  4. Hayley - Philadelphia, PA
    July 25, 2013 at 12:17

    Such a great twist. Very good imagery - builds nicely and conveys the emotion of the piece well.

  5. Jen P. - Philadelphia, PA
    July 25, 2013 at 12:17

    I have caught myself becoming the "Beast." Husbands need a support group :)

  6. Aileen - Philadelphia, PA
    July 25, 2013 at 12:14

    Isaiah, You do a great job of keeping the metaphor of the beast throughout. The twist at the end was most unexpected!

  7. Al - Aldan, PA
    July 24, 2013 at 08:53

    Why restate the obvious? Outstanding job Isaiah!

  8. Dom - Philadelphia, PA
    July 24, 2013 at 01:35

    Hook, line, sinker, boat, lake... TOTALLY fished me in! Nice job,

  9. Melissa - Leesburg, VA
    July 24, 2013 at 01:11

    Well played! I am still laughing!

  10. Sarah - Trenton, NJ
    July 24, 2013 at 11:06

    Surprise ending! Loved the poem. You had me all the way to the end. What is scary, I was probably the beast many times. Thanks for the chuckle.

  11. John Wesley - Philadelphia, PA
    July 24, 2013 at 11:05

    Funny, because it's true!

  12. Frank - Levittown, PA
    July 24, 2013 at 11:02

    You are a talented young man. Watch out Woody Allen and Carl Reiner, here comes Isaiah. I will be laughing until I forget and end up in that chair facing the beast.

  13. Jerry - Philadelphia, PA
    July 24, 2013 at 10:58

    Funny, funny poem. I have faced that beast myself.

  14. MRS. E - FALLS, PENNSYLVANIA
    July 24, 2013 at 10:56

    I will be laughing for hours. A great poem. Have to read it to my husband. Well, maybe not a good idea. Keep writing!

  15. john - seneca falls, ny
    July 24, 2013 at 10:53

    Isaiah: Dude -- you rock! You sooooo got me on that one! I was expecting to read about some snarling, drooling, hideous, growling, monster ready to tear me limb from limb, and then . . . (pause for dramatic effect) "I forgot our anniversary". I am proud to say that I have not been there, and I have not done that. Ranger Renee can tell you that it would not be in my best interests or good for my health if I forgot my wedding anniversary. Still -- once my darling wife asked me, "What date were we married?" I informed her of our anniversary date, and we both shared a chuckle over that one. Is there a double standard? You bet there is! (and I am all right with it)

  16. Joanne - Philadelphia, PA
    July 24, 2013 at 10:21

    Have you considered a career writing greeting cards?

 

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