July 19, 2013 Posted by: Isa

The blood of the angels stains my shoes.
Their tears drown my children.
Their nudity shames my wife.
Their pain scorns my mother.
Their screams awake my dead.
What a vile wind blows here; full of words better left unsaid.

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  1. John - seneca falls, ny
    July 24, 2013 at 08:13

    I agree with Renee. I can take away my own meaning from this poem, but does my meaning agree with your intent? I assume that you were writing about enslaved persons. Am I correct? Excellent work!

  2. Bethany - Philadelphia, PA
    July 21, 2013 at 06:36

    When I read this poem, I desperately wanted to know who the 'angels' were. Thinking about it, though, I wonder if it's important for me to decide who the angels are on my own.

  3. Mike - Philadelphia, PA
    July 21, 2013 at 02:18

    Wow!!! What a moving poem. I read it over five times. It's extremely evocative writing.

  4. Renee - Philadelphia, PA
    July 21, 2013 at 10:00

    Isa, I think it's interesting to ponder whether a reader can and should derive their own meaning from a work. Or, does the author have a responsibility to make his/her intended meaning painfully clear? Anyone have any thoughts on this? I love to take away my own meaning from literature, but my English professors through the years have accused me of missing the author's intent.

  5. Isa - Philadelphia, PA
    July 21, 2013 at 04:09

    Firstly, thanks for all the feedback guys! I'm fascinated that the Image of slavery has been connected with this piece, though that was not my original intent. In truth, I had no original intent in writing the Poem, it's just what came out. So any meaning you derive from it is correct. While I do have my own thoughts about it, they hold no more weight than anyone else's opinion.

  6. Sarah - Trenton, NJ
    July 20, 2013 at 09:11

    Outstanding poem. The words carry a strong image. When I read the poem images of slavery are formed in my mind. Am I reading this excellent poem correctly?

  7. J. Publius - Deptford, NJ
    July 20, 2013 at 01:16

    Powerful imagery! It is interesting that the "vile wind" is "full of words better left unsaid." To me, it was a surprising ending, but words do have tremendous power. Great job!

  8. Al - Aldan, PA
    July 19, 2013 at 11:10

    Absolutely awesome, on so many levels. I can't wait to read more!

  9. Peggy - Natchitoches, Lousiana
    July 19, 2013 at 03:08

    whoa, that reminds me of an African man who was visiting a plantation here in the USA- he was weeping because this is what had happened to his people.It gave me a different perspective.

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